Review: The House of Enchanted Feminization by Barbara Deloto and Thomas Newgen

A house that turns boys into girls?
A college student is looking for a house to rent and comes across an unbelievable deal. According to the gorgeous girl vacating it, the place is enchanted and has a closet with women’s clothing and accoutrements that can never be emptied. She also claims it turned her from a boy into a very special girl while she lived there.

Convinced the renter is a bubble off, and there is no such thing as an enchanted house, plus the fact the deal is irresistible and the house and yard so perfect, Chris decides to rent the place and invites his roommate and best friend Bill to join him.
Will the house turn out to be what the last renter said, or is it all a farce? Will Chris grow into a fully feminized special girl, or will he and Bill continue to live as two regular guys enjoying renting a knock-out house together?

Immerse yourself in Chris’s tale of growth, change, and finding love in this new-adult, LGBT, transgender, crossdressing, feminization, first-time, short-read romance.

While I adore the premise of this story, that of a young man becoming a beautiful woman thanks thanks to an enchanted house, the overall effect is undone by the quality of writing. I truly hate to be critical of someone else’s creativity, and heaven knows I make my own mistakes, so please understand it is with reluctance I have to point out the flaws here. There is a glut of repetition, using the same descriptors again and again, often in connected sentences, which make much of the writing feel like a lazy Mad Libs, where the same nouns and adjectives are selected for each choice.

The pace is breakneck, too, never allowing the reader to live in the moments with the characters. We bounce from a quick change to some initial sexual exploits and, by the conclusion of the short story, we’re getting married and thumbing our nose at traditional marital roles. Sure, there is heat in some of the sex scenes, but for someone who enjoys plot and character, it feels too easy and brief to get a lot of pleasure out of these pages.

Still, the premise is solid, and if all you’re interested in is a hot foursome, the last pages should deliver for you.

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